Archie Smith was a boy like any other, except for
his keen ability to read the thoughts of those around him. It was a
hidden talent, one that he kept secret and shared with no one, not even his
parents. They say ignorance is bliss, and in Archie’s case, it may have been
true. Archie was only eight, and most of what he heard, he didn’t understand.
His gift was one that he had not been born with.
Just ten months earlier, he’d been playing with his older sister, Judie, when
he heard her think that she was too old for his games and that he needed to acquire
more friends. Not knowing that she hadn’t actually said the words, he ran off
and began to cry. It wasn’t until he heard his mother think about how much she
wished she’s married Ben Harper from down the street that he realized what was
happening.
Archie wasn’t the most loved boy at school, and
his new ability didn’t much help his self-esteem. He knew too much now, and
drove his friends away after learning what they thought about him. He ate alone,
played alone, and walked alone. His burden made him drift into silence, and he
stopped speaking. Ten months later, and nothing had changed.
He felt as though he no longer mattered, and like
no one liked him.
Until one night.
He was lying in his bed, awake, but with his eyes
closed when he heard voices coming from his window. He was afraid and confused
as to why there was someone at his window, but equally intrigued. He kept his
eyes closed, and tried to listen to the voices the best he could.
A tiny voice asked, “Is he the one?”
“It could be possible, but he’s awfully small,” another
tiny voice replied.
“We’ve been looking for months, and everything
has lead us here,” the first and more feminine voice said. “He has to be the
one we’ve been looking for. I sense his gift. He reeks of magic.”
“Let’s get on with it then.”
He was astonished to find that he couldn’t read
their thoughts. He needed to know who they were, and he needed to know how this
had happened to him. At this moment, he could no longer lie still. He turned
over, eyes open, and spoke his first words in months into the darkness. “My
name is Archie Smith, I’m eight and I can’t read your minds, but I can read
everyone else’s.”
He couldn’t see were the voices had come from,
but a tiny gasp came out of thin air in the corner of his room and two tiny
people appeared. They were the size of mice, and their skin seemed to
illuminate the room as if it glowed. They hadn’t been there a moment ago, and
seemed to have been invisible.
The little, glowing people stood there with
shocked looks on their faces for quite some time. It was Archie that made the
first move. “Are we going on an adventure? Can I wear my pajamas?”
“Oh, dear. It seems he is the one. Hello, Archie.
My name is Claude Frobisher and I’m 214 years old. We’re from a magic place,
and we would like for you to help us save it.”
Love the last line- this piece definitely reminded me of Harry Potter and the explainable gifts that he has. Great work!
ReplyDeleteI love this whimsical little story! The consequences of being able to read minds here are pretty realistic, and I love the image of the little glowing people. I also love how straightforward Claude is: "We're from a magic place, and we would like for you to help us save it." Just awesome!
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ReplyDeleteI loved the details in this story. I loved how realistic this story was, especially in the way that it was fantasy. I really loved it. And I especially loved the ending line, "'Oh, dear. It seems he is the one. Hello, Archie. My name is Claude Frobisher and I’m 214 years old. We’re from a magic place, and we would like for you to help us save it.'”
You're Great!
Taylor Denton
What a wonderful premise for a much bigger story! I would think that being able to read people's thoughts would be such a curse, and you make that clear with lines about him knowing too much and not understanding most of what he heard. It's interesting the ittybitty creatures the size of mice thought Archie was "awfully small." It makes me wonder what kind of magical place they come from and what would be needed to save it.
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