[Glen, trapped inside his own mind, recollects how he ended up in this predicament]
I can't move, breathe,
speak or hear and it's so dark all the time. If I knew it would be this lonely,
I would've been cremated instead. An eternity of nothingness, alone with my
own thoughts, I rot. As the time wastes away, my loneliness turns to rage and
my confusion turns to violence. I must get out of this damned box. How did I
get here? Who put me here? Where is my family, my wife and daughter? Where did
they go? Is wasn’t supposed to be this way. I was supposed to go someplace
magical and happy. I’ve been cheated. Cheated…
This is James’ fault. He’s the reason I’m here. If he hadn’t
been driving that night, if he’d been sober… I wouldn’t be stuck in this perpetual
darkness! James is to blame. He’s the one that needs to pay. If I ever get out
of this box, he’ll pay.
[The powers that be decide that Glen deserves his revenge
and lets his soul free from the confides of the box. Consumed with rage, he
thinks only of his unfinished business]
There he is, James the criminal. He sits in his armchair,
asleep with the light still on beside him. For what seems like an eternity, I’ve
been trapped in a box in the ground in constant agony and mental torment, and
waited for this moment.
I lean in close to his ear, and then I scream. He doesn’t stir.
I slap him and I kick him, and still he doesn’t stir. What is this trickery?
Why can’t he feel my wrath? I’m blind with rage, and I keep at it until he
wakes.
He seems unhurt, except for the tired look in his eyes. A
look of guilt, I’d never seen on him before. This pleases me, and I float back
to my darkness. But where there should be nothing, a bright light consumes the
earth and swallows me up.
On the other side, my parents are waiting for me with a six
pack of beer, a hot dog and the Royals Game on. Maybe death’s not so bad.
" Maybe death’s not so bad." I love that you had a resolution at the end. A happy, fun ending to a really deep, dark story. This was great!
ReplyDeleteI really love this story. It is very haunting and is probably the closest thing to what being a ghost is really like in my opinion. I love the twisted feeling he gets when he sees his friend's guilt. Great job!
ReplyDeleteLove how you turned a potentially dark story into something lighthearted. You are a very gifted writer with lots of talent- keep up the good work :)
ReplyDeleteHi, Taylor!
ReplyDeleteThis is really creative. You really pulled me in with this story and your use of realistic language. I also liked the way you painted how death might be. It really seems like you took on a new twist to this story. I loved the ending line, "Maybe death's not so bad." I also loved the opening line, it really got me interested!
Have A Great Day!
Taylor Denton
Your story was one of mood whiplash! One minute I think the ghost person is going to do something terrible, the next he's content with beer and hot dogs. The description of being in a casket and being aware of it was totally creepy! I also like the backstory of the character's death being included as well.
ReplyDeleteI like Katie's comment! I think we've all wondered what's on the other side and at least imagined what it would be like to have ghosts among us. How funny that such ordinary things soften his rage at the end. We are all quite simple creatures at our bases, I suppose.
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